If you’re a regular to my blog, you know that I’m experimenting with a web serial called Dawn, the link of which can be found on the Serials page in the sidebar. If you’re new or didn’t know that, now you do.

Well, it seems that I’ve run into a bit of a snag. I think the voice in this story is a bit stilted, a little too hoity toity for what I want to say. I tried working on this last night. Had a false start on a later chapter and tried to rewrite it to suit the mood as opposed to the voice that keeps coming out. In other words, I tried to force it to do something it didn’t want to do. Bad idea.

It forced back, essentially telling me this is the voice for this story and to cut the shit and just write it. The thing is I’m not really happy with the voice but at the same time when I force it, I get half-assed writing that I don’t like either. I have a very strong feeling that once I start writing the vampire parts, the voice is going to change dramatically but I’m thinking along the lines of readers. Will they stick around long enough to read it change?

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